[86] in UA Senate
Re: Updated "Response to Institute-wide Planning Task Force Initial
daemon@ATHENA.MIT.EDU (Daniel Hawkins)
Wed Oct 14 05:35:28 2009
Reply-To: hwkns@MIT.EDU
In-Reply-To: <9d4f87ed0910140208l2516b03bmb2fe0224a48714f0@mail.gmail.com>
Date: Wed, 14 Oct 2009 05:34:46 -0400
From: Daniel Hawkins <hwkns@MIT.EDU>
To: Mike Bennie <mbennie@mit.edu>
Cc: ua-senate@mit.edu, ua-exec@mit.edu
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Last one! And most important. If you don't change the other stuff, change
these:
<major>
Section 6.2.2, pg. 30-31:
Still not fixed. Statements from Unified Proposal should be separated and
indentation of first paragraph should be deleted.
Section 6.3.1, pg. 32:
"This idea involves tracking dorm usage metrics and *charging* residents
individually for their portion of utilities, such as water, electricity, an=
d
heat."
Section 6.4.2, pg. 34:
The first paragraph of this section is a re-summary, not a position. Eithe=
r
scrap it or replace 6.4.1 with it.
Section 6.5.2, pg. 37:
"*Students* would appreciate the increased clarity of the system, but a
re=0Cfined declining balance system should be examined within the context o=
f
larger changes."
</major>
<minor>
Typo? (end quotation instead of start quotation - weird artifact of LaTeX)
in 5.1.2, on bottom of pg. 28 ("Administrative Processes")
Section 2.1, pg. 4:
"Relaxation of *four*-year housing commitment."
Footnote 9, bottom of pg. 34, broken link (probably because of the word
"see")
</minor>
-hwkns
On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at 5:08 AM, Daniel Hawkins <hwkns@mit.edu> wrote:
> Found another typo. I'm also not too happy with the phrase, "reduction i=
n
> student life." It sounds like students will be dying, as opposed to bein=
g
> angry.
>
> Section 4.1.2, pg 26:
> Kitchens and lounges are *[removed "an"]* important aspects *of* many
> dorms*,* and although we could squeeze a few extra dorm rooms into these
> spaces, doing so would destroy valuable sources of community.
>
> -hwkns
>
>
> On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at 3:49 AM, Daniel Hawkins <hwkns@mit.edu> wrote:
>
>> Only one actual typo that I've found so far:
>>
>> Section 1, pg 2
>> "These positions pieces were collected by the *principal* officers, who
>> formatted and edited them for consistency along with writing the
>> introduction and the overarching issues in order to provide a more compl=
ete
>> picture."
>>
>> And these are changes that I personally would have made, based on my
>> preference of how the words flow; they absolutely don't have to be made:
>>
>> Section 1, pg 1
>> "Throughout this process, members of the MIT community not on the Task
>> Force *were able to* suggest or comment on recommendations using the Ide=
a
>> Bank."
>>
>> Section 1, pg 2
>> "These feedback mechanisms provided a wealth of *information on how
>> undergraduates* perceived the recommendations."
>>
>> -hwkns
>>
>>
>>
>> On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at 3:02 AM, Mike Bennie <mbennie@mit.edu> wrote:
>>
>>> Hey everyone,
>>>
>>> The response report has been copy-edited twice more and now includes tw=
o
>>> appendices with the data collected. The report is now available here
>>> http://web.mit.edu/ua/docs/updated_taskforce_response.pdf. If you have
>>> additional feedback or if you find a typo, please email me *immediately=
*.
>>> I am going to CopyTech tomorrow morning (opens at 8am) to get these rep=
orts
>>> printed for administrators.
>>>
>>> Thanks,
>>> Mike
>>>
>>
>>
>
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Last one!=A0 And most important.=A0 If you don't change the other stuff=
, change these:<br><br><major><br><br>Section 6.2.2, pg. 30-31:<br><d=
iv style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">Still not fixed.=A0 Statements from Unified=
Proposal should be separated and indentation of first paragraph should be =
deleted.<br>
</div><br>Section 6.3.1, pg. 32:<br><div style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">"=
;This idea involves tracking dorm usage metrics and <b>charging</b> residen=
ts individually for their portion of utilities, such as water, electricity,=
and heat."<br>
</div><br>Section 6.4.2, pg. 34:<br><div style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">The f=
irst paragraph of this section is a re-summary, not a position.=A0 Either s=
crap it or replace 6.4.1 with it.<br></div><br>Section 6.5.2, pg. 37:<br><d=
iv style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">
"<b>Students</b> would appreciate the increased clarity of the system,=
but a re=0Cfined declining balance system should be examined within the co=
ntext of larger changes."<br></div><br></major><br><minor>=
<br>
<br>
Typo? (end quotation instead of start quotation - weird artifact of
LaTeX) in 5.1.2, on bottom of pg. 28 ("Administrative Processes")=
<br>
<br>
Section 2.1, pg. 4:<br>
<div style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">"Relaxation of <b>four</b>-year hous=
ing commitment."<br>
</div>
<br>Footnote 9, bottom of pg. 34, broken link (probably because of the word=
"see")<br><br>
</minor><br><br><br>-hwkns<br><br><br><br><div class=3D"gmail_quote">=
On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at 5:08 AM, Daniel Hawkins <span dir=3D"ltr"><<a hr=
ef=3D"mailto:hwkns@mit.edu">hwkns@mit.edu</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockqu=
ote class=3D"gmail_quote" style=3D"border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204=
); margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; padding-left: 1ex;">
Found another typo.=A0 I'm also not too happy with the phrase, "re=
duction in student life."=A0 It sounds like students will be dying, as=
opposed to being angry.<br><br>Section 4.1.2, pg 26:<br><div style=3D"marg=
in-left: 40px;">
Kitchens and lounges are <b>[removed "an"]</b> important aspects =
<b>of</b> many dorms<b>,</b> and although we could squeeze a few extra dorm=
rooms into these spaces, doing so would destroy valuable sources of commun=
ity.<br>
</div><br>-hwkns<div><div></div><div class=3D"h5"><br><br><div class=3D"gma=
il_quote">On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at 3:49 AM, Daniel Hawkins <span dir=3D"ltr"=
><<a href=3D"mailto:hwkns@mit.edu" target=3D"_blank">hwkns@mit.edu</a>&g=
t;</span> wrote:<br>
<blockquote class=3D"gmail_quote" style=3D"border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, =
204, 204); margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; padding-left: 1ex;">
Only one actual typo that I've found so far:<br><br>Section 1, pg 2<br>=
<div style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">"These positions pieces were collect=
ed by the <b>principal</b> officers, who formatted and edited them for cons=
istency along with writing the introduction and the overarching issues in o=
rder to provide a more complete picture."<br>
</div><br>And these are changes that I personally would have made, based on=
my preference of how the words flow; they absolutely don't have to be =
made:<br><br>Section 1, pg 1<br><div style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">"Thr=
oughout this process, members of the MIT community not on the Task Force <b=
>were able to</b> suggest or comment on recommendations using the Idea Bank=
."<br>
</div><br>Section 1, pg 2<br><div style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">"These =
feedback mechanisms provided a wealth of <b>information on how undergraduat=
es</b> perceived the recommendations."<br></div><br>-hwkns<div><div>
</div><div><br><br><br>
<div class=3D"gmail_quote">On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at 3:02 AM, Mike Bennie <sp=
an dir=3D"ltr"><<a href=3D"mailto:mbennie@mit.edu" target=3D"_blank">mbe=
nnie@mit.edu</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class=3D"gmail_quote" sty=
le=3D"border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex;=
padding-left: 1ex;">
<div bgcolor=3D"#ffffff" text=3D"#000000">
Hey everyone,<br>
<br>
The response report has been copy-edited twice more and now includes
two appendices with the data collected. The report is now available
here <a href=3D"http://web.mit.edu/ua/docs/updated_taskforce_response.pdf" =
target=3D"_blank">http://web.mit.edu/ua/docs/updated_taskforce_response.pdf=
</a>.
If you have additional feedback or if you find a typo, please email me <b>i=
mmediately</b>.
I am going to CopyTech tomorrow morning (opens at 8am) to get these
reports printed for administrators.<br>
<br>
Thanks,<br>
Mike<br>
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