[85] in UA Senate
Re: Updated "Response to Institute-wide Planning Task Force Initial
daemon@ATHENA.MIT.EDU (Daniel Hawkins)
Wed Oct 14 05:08:37 2009
Reply-To: hwkns@MIT.EDU
In-Reply-To: <9d4f87ed0910140049j68a4bb74saf8d21e9dc0d80c0@mail.gmail.com>
Date: Wed, 14 Oct 2009 05:08:17 -0400
From: Daniel Hawkins <hwkns@MIT.EDU>
To: Mike Bennie <mbennie@mit.edu>
Cc: ua-senate@mit.edu, ua-exec@mit.edu
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Found another typo. I'm also not too happy with the phrase, "reduction in
student life." It sounds like students will be dying, as opposed to being
angry.
Section 4.1.2, pg 26:
Kitchens and lounges are *[removed "an"]* important aspects *of* many dorms*
,* and although we could squeeze a few extra dorm rooms into these spaces,
doing so would destroy valuable sources of community.
-hwkns
On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at 3:49 AM, Daniel Hawkins <hwkns@mit.edu> wrote:
> Only one actual typo that I've found so far:
>
> Section 1, pg 2
> "These positions pieces were collected by the *principal* officers, who
> formatted and edited them for consistency along with writing the
> introduction and the overarching issues in order to provide a more complete
> picture."
>
> And these are changes that I personally would have made, based on my
> preference of how the words flow; they absolutely don't have to be made:
>
> Section 1, pg 1
> "Throughout this process, members of the MIT community not on the Task
> Force *were able to* suggest or comment on recommendations using the Idea
> Bank."
>
> Section 1, pg 2
> "These feedback mechanisms provided a wealth of *information on how
> undergraduates* perceived the recommendations."
>
> -hwkns
>
>
>
> On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at 3:02 AM, Mike Bennie <mbennie@mit.edu> wrote:
>
>> Hey everyone,
>>
>> The response report has been copy-edited twice more and now includes two
>> appendices with the data collected. The report is now available here
>> http://web.mit.edu/ua/docs/updated_taskforce_response.pdf. If you have
>> additional feedback or if you find a typo, please email me *immediately*.
>> I am going to CopyTech tomorrow morning (opens at 8am) to get these reports
>> printed for administrators.
>>
>> Thanks,
>> Mike
>>
>
>
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Found another typo.=A0 I'm also not too happy with the phrase, "re=
duction in student life."=A0 It sounds like students will be dying, as=
opposed to being angry.<br><br>Section 4.1.2, pg 26:<br><div style=3D"marg=
in-left: 40px;">
Kitchens and lounges are <b>[removed "an"]</b> important aspects =
<b>of</b> many dorms<b>,</b> and although we could squeeze a few extra dorm=
rooms into these spaces, doing so would destroy valuable sources of commun=
ity.<br>
</div><br>-hwkns<br><br><div class=3D"gmail_quote">On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at =
3:49 AM, Daniel Hawkins <span dir=3D"ltr"><<a href=3D"mailto:hwkns@mit.e=
du">hwkns@mit.edu</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class=3D"gmail_quote=
" style=3D"border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0=
.8ex; padding-left: 1ex;">
Only one actual typo that I've found so far:<br><br>Section 1, pg 2<br>=
<div style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">"These positions pieces were collect=
ed by the <b>principal</b> officers, who formatted and edited them for cons=
istency along with writing the introduction and the overarching issues in o=
rder to provide a more complete picture."<br>
</div><br>And these are changes that I personally would have made, based on=
my preference of how the words flow; they absolutely don't have to be =
made:<br><br>Section 1, pg 1<br><div style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">"Thr=
oughout this process, members of the MIT community not on the Task Force <b=
>were able to</b> suggest or comment on recommendations using the Idea Bank=
."<br>
</div><br>Section 1, pg 2<br><div style=3D"margin-left: 40px;">"These =
feedback mechanisms provided a wealth of <b>information on how undergraduat=
es</b> perceived the recommendations."<br></div><br>-hwkns<div><div>
</div><div class=3D"h5"><br><br><br>
<div class=3D"gmail_quote">On Wed, Oct 14, 2009 at 3:02 AM, Mike Bennie <sp=
an dir=3D"ltr"><<a href=3D"mailto:mbennie@mit.edu" target=3D"_blank">mbe=
nnie@mit.edu</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class=3D"gmail_quote" sty=
le=3D"border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex;=
padding-left: 1ex;">
<div bgcolor=3D"#ffffff" text=3D"#000000">
Hey everyone,<br>
<br>
The response report has been copy-edited twice more and now includes
two appendices with the data collected. The report is now available
here <a href=3D"http://web.mit.edu/ua/docs/updated_taskforce_response.pdf" =
target=3D"_blank">http://web.mit.edu/ua/docs/updated_taskforce_response.pdf=
</a>.
If you have additional feedback or if you find a typo, please email me <b>i=
mmediately</b>.
I am going to CopyTech tomorrow morning (opens at 8am) to get these
reports printed for administrators.<br>
<br>
Thanks,<br>
Mike<br>
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