[1087] in UA Senate
Re: UAS 10.2: Orientation Resolution
daemon@ATHENA.MIT.EDU (Jessica Chen)
Mon Feb 14 18:51:12 2011
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From: Jessica Chen <jessicachen.dbhs@gmail.com>
Date: Mon, 14 Feb 2011 18:50:27 -0500
To: hwkns@mit.edu
Cc: Karan Takhar <ua-next-senators@mit.edu>, ua-senate@mit.edu
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*snaps*
Sincerely,
~Jessica Chen
MIT 2014
On Mon, Feb 14, 2011 at 6:07 PM, Daniel Hawkins <hwkns@mit.edu> wrote:
> First of all, excellent job taking initiative and writing this bill. I d=
o
> have a few minor editing suggestions (I'm very happy with the resolution
> overall, and if these don't get changed I still support it, but I don't
> think they're particularly controversial):
>
> where: Title
> current phrasing: "Resolution to *Support* the 2006 UA Report on
> Orientation"
> proposed change: "Resolution to *Reaffirm the Conclusions and
> Recommendations of* the 2006 UA Report on Orientation"
> reason: It's obvious that we support our own report; what isn't obvious =
is
> that it's still relevant.
>
> where: Last Whereas Clause
> current phrasing: "many of the conclusions and positions ... remain* true=
*
> ;"
> proposed change: "many of the conclusions and positions ... remain *true
> and relevant to current discussions*;"
> reason: Again, the focus on relevance, as opposed to factual correctness=
.
>
> where: On Rex
> current phrasing: "These interactions *play a crucial role in assisting
> freshmen =0Cfind a supportive community best aligned with their social an=
d
> academic* interests."
> proposed change: "These interactions *allow freshmen to find a supportiv=
e
> community that is aligned with their social, cultural, and academic*inter=
ests."
> reason: It's awkward, and also grammatically incorrect.
>
> where: On RBA
> current phrasing: "whether *or not RBAs housing decisions are* binding"
> proposed change: "whether *housing assignments to that dormitory will be=
*binding"
> reason: It's much clearer this way.
>
> where: On Student Engagement
> current phrasing: "=0Cfinal housing assignments, and other *high-involve=
ment,
> high-impact events* (e.g. CityDays)."
> proposed change: "final housing assignments, and other *events that
> involve or impact students* (e.g., CityDays)."
> reason: It just sounds better, IMO.
>
> where: Last That Clause
> current phrasing: *[entire clause]*
> proposed change: "*That we implore both the Dean for Undergraduate
> Education and the Dean for Student Life to read and understand the 2006 U=
A
> Report on Orientation and the above statements before setting the
> Orientation schedule for Fall 2011.*"
> reason: Trying to command administrators (especially with a resolution,
> not a bill) only makes it look like we don't know what we're doing. This
> changes the tone to that of a resolution while (hopefully) saying the sam=
e
> thing.
>
>
> -hwkns
>
>
>
> On Mon, Feb 14, 2011 at 2:30 PM, Karan Takhar <ua-next-senators@mit.edu>w=
rote:
>
>> Hello Senate,
>>
>> Last night, we worked to write a resolution based outlining the UA's
>> position on orientation in response to the current proposed changes from=
the
>> UAAP. The resolution is based on the points brought up during Saturday's
>> caucus. We plan to bring this up as new business at tonight's meeting.
>>
>> The link to the resolution is here:
>> http://web.mit.edu/ua/senate/UAS42/10/orientation-report.pdf .
>>
>> Thanks,
>>
>> Karan Takhar
>>
>> Next House Senator
>> Courses 14 and 18: Class of 2013
>
>
>
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*snaps*<br><br clear=3D"all">Sincerely,<br>~Jessica Chen<br>MIT 2014<br>
<br><br><div class=3D"gmail_quote">On Mon, Feb 14, 2011 at 6:07 PM, Daniel =
Hawkins <span dir=3D"ltr"><<a href=3D"mailto:hwkns@mit.edu">hwkns@mit.ed=
u</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class=3D"gmail_quote" style=3D"margi=
n: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); padding-le=
ft: 1ex;">
First of all, excellent job taking initiative and writing this bill.=A0 I d=
o have a few minor editing suggestions (I'm very happy with the resolut=
ion overall, and if these don't get changed I still support it, but I d=
on't think they're particularly controversial):<br>
<br>where: Title<br>current phrasing: "Resolution to <b>Support</b> th=
e 2006 UA Report on Orientation"<br>proposed change: "Resolution =
to <b>Reaffirm the Conclusions and Recommendations of</b> the 2006 UA Repor=
t on Orientation"<br>
reason:=A0 It's obvious that we support our own report; what isn't =
obvious is that it's still relevant.<br><br>where: Last Whereas Clause<=
br>current phrasing: "many of the conclusions and positions ... remain=
<b> true</b>;"<br>
proposed change:=A0 "many of the conclusions and positions ... remain =
<b>true and relevant to current discussions</b>;"<br>reason:=A0 Again,=
the focus on relevance, as opposed to factual correctness.<br><br>where:=
=A0 On Rex<br>
current phrasing:=A0 "These interactions <b>play a crucial role in ass=
isting freshmen =0Cfind a supportive community best aligned with their soci=
al and academic</b> interests."<br>proposed change:=A0 "These int=
eractions <b>allow freshmen to find a supportive community that is aligned =
with their social, cultural, and academic</b> interests."<br>
reason:=A0 It's awkward, and also grammatically incorrect.<br><br>where=
:=A0 On RBA<br>current phrasing:=A0 "whether <b>or not RBAs housing de=
cisions are</b> binding"<br>proposed change:=A0 "whether <b>housi=
ng assignments to that dormitory will be</b> binding"<br>
reason:=A0 It's much clearer this way.<br><br>where:=A0 On Student Enga=
gement<br>current phrasing:=A0 "=0Cfinal housing assignments, and othe=
r <b>high-involvement, high-impact events</b> (e.g. CityDays)."<br>pro=
posed change:=A0 "final housing assignments, and other <b>events that =
involve or impact students</b> (e.g., CityDays)."<br>
reason:=A0 It just sounds better, IMO.<br><br>where:=A0 Last That Clause<br=
>current phrasing:=A0 <b>[entire clause]</b><br>proposed change:=A0 "<=
b>That we implore both the Dean for Undergraduate Education and the Dean fo=
r Student Life to read and understand the 2006 UA Report on Orientation and=
the above statements before setting the Orientation schedule for Fall 2011=
.</b>"<br>
reason:=A0 Trying to command administrators (especially with a resolution, =
not a bill) only makes it look like we don't know what we're doing.=
=A0 This changes the tone to that of a resolution while (hopefully) saying =
the same thing.<br>
<br><br>-hwkns<br><br><br><br><div class=3D"gmail_quote"><div class=3D"im">=
On Mon, Feb 14, 2011 at 2:30 PM, Karan Takhar <span dir=3D"ltr"><<a href=
=3D"mailto:ua-next-senators@mit.edu" target=3D"_blank">ua-next-senators@mit=
.edu</a>></span> wrote:<br>
</div><div><div></div><div class=3D"h5"><blockquote class=3D"gmail_quote" s=
tyle=3D"margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204=
); padding-left: 1ex;">
Hello Senate,<br>
<br>Last night, we worked to write a resolution
based outlining the UA's position on orientation in response to the=20
current proposed changes from the UAAP. The resolution is based on the=20
points brought up during Saturday's caucus. We plan to bring this up as=
new business at tonight's meeting. <br><br>The link to the resolution=
=20
is here: <a href=3D"http://web.mit.edu/ua/senate/UAS42/10/orientation-repor=
t.pdf" target=3D"_blank">http://web.mit.edu/ua/senate/UAS42/10/orientation-=
report.pdf</a> . <br>
<br>Thanks,<br><br>Karan Takhar<br><br>Next House Senator<br>Courses 14 and=
18: Class of 2013
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